Talk:Onision/Shiloh

You asked for critiques for this on your userpage

So here they are. Some things:

1) First and foremost, I personally believe this person is a Youtube Nobody, and articles like this are the reason ED has had more than one Youtube Improvement Drive in the past. Not every view whore needs their own article, or else it gets repetitive and impossible to sift through.

2) Should you dig up enough drama/lulz to make this article worth having, I still have to stress that the grammar needs a lot of work. Syntax, capitalization, AND ALL THOSE FUCKING COMMAS.

3) On a brighter note I'm glad you're taking advantage of userspace and asking for peer review. Yu learnt!

TylerRosenow º Ӕ talk º ✉ 01:13, 19 January 2012 (CET)